Thursday, December 29, 2011

First story shuffle

Here is are my two story shuffles! I hope you like!

Cross My Heart~Marianas Trench

Lilit held the dull side of her knife to her uncle's throat. “You promise?”
“Yes I promise” Her favorite uncle replied
“You cross your heart?”
“I, Zacke brother of Zaven cross my heart and hope to die if I break my promise to my niece, Lilit.” Lilit lowered her knife.
“Thanks, I don’t think I could go on my own anymore”
Zacke smiled “Do you think I would let my favorite niece roam these dangerous streets alone?”
“I’m almost 19 and I can protect myself thank you very much!” Lilit cried indignantly.
The young man raised his eyebrows “Well yes I suppose so... But why did you insist on my promising?”
Lilit looked uncharacteristically embarrassed “Well… I thought you would hate me for letting my father die.”
Zacke’s eyes widened “Me? Hate you? I feel pity for you!”
Lilit sighed in relief “I’m so glad I have you, Zacke.”
He hugged the almost-adult’s shoulders
“Me too, friend.”

Haven't Had Enough~Marianas Trench
 
Eugene strayed in Dr. Nora Barlow’s cabin as long as he could. He knew that if he didn’t walk Tazza properly Nora would call Dylan to do it and he would no longer be able to see her. This was something he just couldn’t take. As he walked towards the gut he heard Mr. Rigby’s voice telling him that not only was his precious Nora married but she was also about 20 years older than him, but for some reason he just couldn’t manage to get her out of his head.  I guess love is blind he thought. He carried on walking down the gut, desperate to walk Tazza correctly so that Nora would need him. Oh how he wish he could go back one more time and begin it. Back before she was married. But alas that was not an option so his only other choice was to somehow end it right; make her fall desperately in love with him and forget that silly “Alan Barlow” and run off with the 16 year old airman. The young middy’s fantasizing was cut short by Mr. Rigby, who was topside helping the riggers.
“What are you doing up here with Tazza?!” he half shouted. At once Eugene realized that he had once more messed up one of Tazza walks
“Oh Huxley clart!” He swore.
“Were you day-dreaming about Dr. Barlow again?” Mr. Rigby said in a disapproving voice
“Yes” Eugene said sheepishly
“This has got to stop!”
“Yes, sir”
“Good now go return Tazza to Dr. Barlow’s cabin and then come up here to help us” Mr. Rigby turned back to his work. Eugene knew the boson was right but continued to wish for the impossible as he walked back to the lady boffin’s cabin. 

Please comment!

3 comments:

  1. Hahaha. Zaven has a brother named Zacke? Who knew? I liked it.
    Just a COPS pointer, though; you're always supposed to start a new line when a new person talks to avoid confusion.
    I have no comments regarding your actual writing style, though, because I like it :)

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  2. Thanks, I am not so good at writing conventions like that.

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